diff --git a/devices/hololens/hololens-commercial-features.md b/devices/hololens/hololens-commercial-features.md
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--- a/devices/hololens/hololens-commercial-features.md
+++ b/devices/hololens/hololens-commercial-features.md
@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@ ms.localizationpriority: medium
 ms.reviewer: 
 manager: jarrettr
 appliesto:
-- HoloLens 1
+- HoloLens (1st Gen)
 - HoloLens 2
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@@ -22,26 +22,26 @@ HoloLens includes features that make it easier for businesses to manage HoloLens
 
 Every HoloLens 2 device has commercial features available.
 
-HoloLens (Gen 1) came with two licensing options, the developer license and a commercial license. To unlock HoloLens's commercial capabilities, upgrade from the developer license to a commercial license. To purchase the Microsoft HoloLens Commercial Suite, contact your local Microsoft account manager.
+HoloLens (1st Gen) came with two licensing options, the developer license and a commercial license. To unlock HoloLens's commercial capabilities, upgrade from the developer license to a commercial license. To purchase the Microsoft HoloLens Commercial Suite, contact your local Microsoft account manager.
 
 >[!VIDEO https://www.youtube.com/embed/tNd0e2CiAkE]
 
 ## Key commercial features
 
-- **Kiosk mode.** With HoloLens kiosk mode, you can limit which apps to run to enable demo or showcase experiences.
+- **Kiosk mode.** You can use HoloLens in demo or showcase experiences by using kiosk mode, to limit which apps can run.
 
-  ![With kiosk mode, HoloLens launches directly into the app of your choice.](images/201608-kioskmode-400px.png)
+  ![Using kiosk mode, HoloLens launches directly into the app of your choice.](images/201608-kioskmode-400px.png)
 
 - **Mobile Device Management (MDM) for HoloLens.** Your IT department can manage multiple HoloLens devices simultaneously by using solutions such as Microsoft Intune. You can manage settings, select apps to install, and set security configurations that are tailored to your organization's needs.
 
   ![Mobile Device Management on HoloLens provides enterprise-grade device management across multiple devices.](images/201608-enterprisemanagement-400px.png)
 
-- **Windows Update for Business.** Controlled operating system updates to devices and support for long term servicing branch.
+- **Windows Update for Business.** Windows Update for Business provides controlled operating system updates to devices and support for the long-term servicing channel.
 - **Data security.** BitLocker data encryption is enabled on HoloLens to provide the same level of security protection as any other Windows device.
 - **Work access.** Anyone in your organization can remotely connect to the corporate network through virtual private network on a HoloLens. HoloLens can also access Wi-Fi networks that require credentials.
 - **Microsoft Store for Business.** Your IT department can also set up an enterprise private store, containing only your company’s apps for your specific HoloLens usage. Securely distribute your enterprise software to selected group of enterprise users.
 
-## Development Edition vs. Commercial Suite
+## Feature comparison between editions
 
 |Features |HoloLens Development Edition |HoloLens Commercial Suite |HoloLens 2 |
 |---|:---:|:---:|:---:|
@@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ HoloLens (Gen 1) came with two licensing options, the developer license and a co
 
 ## Enabling commercial features
 
-Commercial features like Microsoft Store for Business, kiosk mode, and enterprise Wi-Fi access are set up by an organization's IT admin. The [Microsoft HoloLens](https://docs.microsoft.com/hololens) documentation provides step-by-step instructions for device enrollment and installing apps from Microsoft Store for Business.
+Your organization's IT admin can set up commercial features like Microsoft Store for Business, kiosk mode, and enterprise Wi-Fi access. The [Microsoft HoloLens](https://docs.microsoft.com/hololens) documentation provides step-by-step instructions for enrolling devices and installing apps from Microsoft Store for Business.
 
 ## See also