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 - Windows 10, version 1903 and newer
 - The next version of Windows Server
 
-Microsoft is deeply committed to providing you with effective controls over your data and ongoing transparency into our data handling practices. As part of this effort, we are moving our major products and services to a model where data sent back to Microsoft from customer devices will be classified as either **Required** or **Optional**. We believe this will provide our customers with a simpler experience – information should be easier to find, easier to understand, and easier to act upon through the tools we provide.
+Microsoft is committed to providing you with effective controls over your data and ongoing transparency into our data handling practices. As part of this effort, we are moving our major products and services to a model where data sent back to Microsoft from customer devices will be classified as either **Required** or **Optional**. We believe this will provide our customers with a simpler experience – information should be easier to find, easier to understand, and easier to act upon through the tools we provide.
 
 This topic is meant for IT administrators and explains the changes Windows is making to align to the new data collection taxonomy. These changes are focused in two areas:
 
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 ## Behaviorial changes
 
-In an upcoming release of Windows 10, we’re simplifying your diagnostic data controls by moving from four diagnostic data controls to three: **Diagnostic data off**, **Required**, and **Optional**. If your devices are set to **Enhanced** when they are upgraded, the device settings will be migrated to the more privacy-preserving setting of **Required diagnostic data**, which means that analytic services that leverage enhanced data collection may not work properly. For a list of services, see the section named, **Services that rely on Enhanced diagnostic data**, later in this topic. Administrators should read through the details and determine whether to apply these new policies to restore the same collection settings as they had before this change. For a list of steps, see the section named **Configure a Windows 10 device to limit diagnostics**. For more information on services that rely on Enhanced diagnostic data, see **Services that rely on Enhanced diagnostic data**.
+In an upcoming release of Windows 10, we’re simplifying your diagnostic data controls by moving from four diagnostic data controls to three: **Diagnostic data off**, **Required**, and **Optional**. If your devices are set to **Enhanced** when they are upgraded, the device settings will be migrated to the more privacy-preserving setting of **Required diagnostic data**, which means that analytic services that leverage enhanced data collection may not work properly. For a list of services, see the section named, **Services that rely on Enhanced diagnostic data**, later in this topic. Administrators should read through the details and determine whether to apply these new policies to restore the same collection settings as they had before this change. For a list of steps, see the section named **Configure a Windows 10 device to limit crash dumps and logs**. For more information on services that rely on Enhanced diagnostic data, see **Services that rely on Enhanced diagnostic data**.
 
 Additionally, you will see the following policy changes in an upcoming release of Windows 10:
 
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 >[!Important]
 >All of the changes mentioned in this section will not be released on versions of Windows, version 1809 and earlier as well as Windows Server 2019 and earlier.
 
-## Configure a Windows 10 device to limit diagnostics
+## Configure a Windows 10 device to limit crash dumps and logs
 
-With the Enhanced diagnostic data level being split out into new policies, we're providing additional controls to manage what types of dumps are collected and whether to send additional diagnostic logs. Here are some steps on how to configure them:
+With the Enhanced diagnostic data level being split out into new policies, we're providing additional controls to manage what types of crash dumps are collected and whether to send additional diagnostic logs. Here are some steps on how to configure them:
 
 1. Choose to send optional diagnostic data by setting one of the following policies:
    - Group Policy: Computer Configuration > Administrative Templates > Windows Components > Data Collection and Preview Builds > **Allow Diagnostic Data**. Set the policy value to **Send optional diagnostic data**.
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 ## Services that rely on Enhanced diagnostic data
 
-Customers who use services that depend on Windows diagnostic data, such as Microsoft Managed Desktop or Desktop Analytics, may be impacted by the functional changes when they are released. These services will be updated to address these changes and guidance will be published on how to configure them properly.
+Customers who use services that depend on Windows diagnostic data, such as Microsoft Managed Desktop or Desktop Analytics, may be impacted by the behavioral changes when they are released. These services will be updated to address these changes and guidance will be published on how to configure them properly.
 
-The following provides a list of the known changes:
+The following provides information on the current configurations:
 - [Microsoft Managed Desktop](https://aka.ms/mmd-diagnostic-data-level)
 - [Desktop Analytics](https://docs.microsoft.com/mem/configmgr/desktop-analytics/overview)