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-Today's workforce has more freedom and mobility than ever before, but the risk of data exposure is also at its highest. At Microsoft, we are focused on getting customers to the cloud to benefit from hybrid workstyles while improving security management. Built on Zero Trust principles, Windows 11 works with Microsoft cloud services to safeguard sensitive information while controlling access and mitigating threats.
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-From identity and device management to Office apps and data storage, Windows 11 and integrated cloud services can help improve productivity, security, and resilience anywhere.
+The workplace is constantly evolving, with many employees working outside the office at least some of the time. While remote work and cloud services provide more flexibility, they also result in more endpoints and locations for organizations to worry about. Windows 11, combined with Microsoft Entra ID for identity management, and modern device management (MDM) tools like Microsoft Intune, can be the foundation of a Zero Trust security model that enables flexible workstyles while controlling access, safeguarding sensitive information, and mitigating threats.