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 ### Phased deployment
 
-A phased deployment model is recommended for rolling out upgrades to devices in your organization. This is identical to the [service management model](/windows/deployment/update/create-deployment-plan) recommended for Windows 10 updates. With this method, you define the time and scope of devices that will migrate to Windows Sun Valley. 
+A phased deployment model is recommended for rolling out upgrades to devices in your organization. This is identical to the [service management model](/windows/deployment/update/create-deployment-plan) recommended for Windows 10 updates and includes separate groups or 'rings' that receive an update at different times. For example:
+- Preview: Windows Sun Valley planning and development
+- Limited: Windows Sun Valley pilot deployment
+- Broad: Windows Sun Valley rollout
 
-A [calendar based approac](/windows/deployment/update/plan-define-strategy#calendar-approaches) is an effective method to plan Windows Sun Valley upgrades that includes scheduling of future Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley updates.
+With this method, you define the timing and scope of devices that will migrate to Windows Sun Valley, documenting and validating each phase before moving to the next one.
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+A [calendar based approac](/windows/deployment/update/plan-define-strategy#calendar-approaches) is an effective method to plan Windows Sun Valley upgrades that includes scheduling of future Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley updates.  The calendar based approach can be very useful for update planning in a mixed Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley enviroment.
 
 Also consider [assigning roles](/windows/deployment/update/plan-define-readiness) within your organization to groups and individuals you'll need to carry out specific tasks, if you have not already done so.
 
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 - Identify gaps
 - Implement required updates
 
-## Windows 10 lifecycle
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-For organizations who cannot move to Windows Sun Valley immediately, Microsoft’s guidance is to standardize devices on Windows 10, version 21H2. This release will be the last feature update to Windows 10, and will receive specific feature enhancements to ease migrating to Windows Sun Valley. 
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-Windows 10 will continue to be supported with security updates until October 2025.
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 ## Windows Sun Valley servicing
 
 ### Cadence
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 ## Application readiness
 
-Windows Sun Valley is designed to work with the applications you are currently using with Windows 10. If an application compatibility issue is identified, Microsoft provides services to help you remediate the problem. For more information, see [Application compatibility](windows-sv-prepare.md#application-compatibility)  
+Windows Sun Valley is designed to work with the applications you are currently using with Windows 10. If an application compatibility issue is identified, Microsoft provides services to help you remediate the problem. For more information, see [Application compatibility](windows-sv-prepare.md#application-compatibility).
 
+## Windows 10 coexistence
 
+For organizations that need to maintain a mixed enviroment with coexisting Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley devices, Microsoft’s guidance is to standardize on Windows 10, version 21H2. This release will be the last feature update to Windows 10, and will receive specific feature enhancements to ease migrating to Windows Sun Valley. 
 
+Windows 10 will continue to be supported with security updates until October 2025.
 
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-[Get ready for Windows Sun Valley](windows-sv-prepare.md)
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windows/whats-new/windows-sv-prepare.md

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 - Update your management tools, infrastructure, and policies
 - [Prepare users](/windows/deployment/update/prepare-deploy-windows#prepare-users) for Windows Sun Valley. 
 
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-When these actions are completed, you can begin your phased deployment of Windows Sun Valley.
+After completing these actions, you can begin your phased deployment of Windows Sun Valley.
 
 ## Application compatibility
 

windows/whats-new/windows-sv-requirements.md

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 -   Windows Sun Valley, version 21H2
 
-This article lists the sotware and physical hardware requirements to run Windows Sun Valley. Windows Sun Valley can also be run on Virtual Machines (VMs).
+This article lists the sotware and physical hardware requirements to run Windows Sun Valley. Windows Sun Valley is also supported on a Virtual Machine (VM).
 
 ## Software requirements
 
-The upgrade to Sun Valley is available for devices running Windows 10, version 20H1 or newer, on eligible hardware.
+The upgrade to Sun Valley is available for devices running Windows 10, version 20H1 or later, on eligible hardware.
 
 S mode is not supported on Windows Sun Valley. If you are running Windows in S mode, you will need to first [switch out of S mode](/windows/deployment/windows-10-pro-in-s-mode) prior to upgrading.  
 
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 ## Network requirements
 
-Internet connectivity is required for the Home Edition 
+Internet connectivity is required for the Home edition of Windows Sun Valley.
 
 ## Next steps
 

windows/whats-new/windows-sv.md

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 ## How to get Windows Sun Valley
 
 Windows Sun Valley will delivered as an upgrade to devices running Windows 10 beginning in the first half of 2022. Windows Sun Valley will also be available on new devices that meet the hardware requirements.
-- For managed PCs that meet requirements, the upgrade will be provided using the same process that you use today for feature updates. 
-- For unmanaged PCs that meet requirements, the upgrade will be offered through Windows Update.
+- For managed PCs that meet requirements, the upgrade will be provided using the same process that you use today for feature updates. For more information, see [Management tools](windows-sv-prepare.md#management-tools).
+- For unmanaged PCs that meet requirements, the upgrade will be offered through Windows Update using [intelligent rollout](https://techcommunity.microsoft.com/t5/windows-it-pro-blog/using-machine-learning-to-improve-the-windows-10-update/ba-p/877860). Windows 10 devices purchased after June 2021 that meet or exceed the minimum hardware requirements for Windows Sun Valley will be offered the upgrade starting in October of 2021. 
 - You can get early access to test Windows Sun Valley by joining the [Windows Insider Program](https://insider.windows.com), or by enabling pre-release Windows 10 feature updates in Configuration Manager or Windows Server Update Services (WSUS).
 
 For more information about eligibility to upgrade, see [Windows Sun Valley requirements](windows-sv-requirements.md).
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 ## Windows Sun Valley servicing
 
-For details about the Windows Sun Valley servicing cadence and lifecycle, see [Windows Sun Valley servicing](sv-plan.md#servicing).
+For details about the Windows Sun Valley servicing cadence and lifecycle, see [Windows Sun Valley servicing](windows-sv-plan.md#servicing).
 
 ## Windows 10 servicing
 
-Windows 10 will continue to be supported with security updates until October 2025. For more information, see [Windows 10 lifecycle](windows-sv.plan.md#windows-10-lifecycle).
+Windows 10 will continue to be supported with security updates until October 2025. For more information, see [Windows 10 lifecycle](windows-sv-plan.md#windows-10-lifecycle).
 
 ## Next steps