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windows/whats-new/windows-sv-plan.md

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 ## Deployment planning
 
-This article provides you with planning guidance to deploy Windows Sun Valley in your organization, specifically: 
+This article provides planning guidance to deploy Windows Sun Valley, specifically: 
  
    - Adoption guidance
    - Infrastructure planning
@@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ This article provides you with planning guidance to deploy Windows Sun Valley in
 
 ### Deployment process
 
-Consider the following order of activities:
+Consider using the following process to deploy Windows Sun Valley:
 1. Preview Windows Sun Valley and create a deployment plan. 
 2. Test critical applications and management policies.
 3. Update devices to the Windows 10, version 20H1 or later.
@@ -42,20 +42,22 @@ Consider the following order of activities:
 
 ### Phased deployment
 
-A phased deployment model is recommended for rolling out upgrades to devices in your organization. This is identical to the [service management model](/windows/deployment/update/create-deployment-plan) recommended for Windows 10 updates and includes separate groups or 'rings' that receive an update at different times. For example:
+A phased deployment model is recommended for rolling out upgrades to devices in your organization. This is is described in the [service management model](/windows/deployment/update/create-deployment-plan) that is recommended for Windows 10 updates. It includes separate groups or 'rings' of devices that receive updates based on their role in your deployment plan. For example:
 - Preview: Windows Sun Valley planning and development
 - Limited: Windows Sun Valley pilot deployment
 - Broad: Windows Sun Valley rollout
 
 With this method, you define the timing and scope of devices that will migrate to Windows Sun Valley, documenting and validating each phase before moving to the next one.
 
-A [calendar based approac](/windows/deployment/update/plan-define-strategy#calendar-approaches) is an effective method to plan Windows Sun Valley upgrades that includes scheduling of future Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley updates.  The calendar based approach can be very useful for update planning in a mixed Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley enviroment.
+Use a [calendar based approach](/windows/deployment/update/plan-define-strategy#calendar-approaches) to plan Windows Sun Valley upgrades, and include scheduling of future Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley updates.  The calendar based approach can be very useful for update planning in a mixed Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley enviroment.
 
 Also consider [assigning roles](/windows/deployment/update/plan-define-readiness) within your organization to groups and individuals you'll need to carry out specific tasks, if you have not already done so.
 
 ## Infrastructure and tools
 
-You can use your current management tools and processes to manage quality updates for both Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley, in addition to using them to move between the two products beginning on the General Availability (GA) date for Windows Sun Valley. As part of your deployment planning, you will need to [evaluate your infrastructure](/windows/deployment/update/eval-infra-tools) and tools to verify they can support deployment and updates for Windows Sun Valley.  For more information about updates to support the deployment of Windows Sun Valley, see [Management tools](windows-sv-prepare.md#management-tools).
+You can use your current management tools and processes to manage quality updates for both Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley, as well as using them to move between the two products beginning on the General Availability (GA) date for Windows Sun Valley. 
+
+As part of your deployment planning, you will need to [evaluate your infrastructure](/windows/deployment/update/eval-infra-tools) and tools to verify they can support deployment and updates for Windows Sun Valley.  For more information about updates to support the deployment of Windows Sun Valley, see [Management tools](windows-sv-prepare.md#management-tools).
 
 ## Configurations
 
@@ -68,13 +70,13 @@ Assess your current [configurations](/windows/deployment/update/eval-infra-tools
 
 ### Cadence
 
-Windows Sun Valley feature updates will be released once per year in the second half of the year. Quality updates will be released each month on the second Tuesday of the month. 
+Windows Sun Valley feature updates will be released once per year, in the second half of the year. Quality updates will be released each month, on the second Tuesday of the month. 
 
 Microsoft will continue to provide one cumulative package that includes all latest cumulative updates (LCUs) and servicing stack updates (SSUs), if applicable, for Windows Sun Valley. This will be provided as a single package to Windows Server Update Services (WSUS) and Catalog, and have them orchestrated on the device. This capability is also the default for devices using Windows Update. 
 
 ### Lifecycle
 
-Windows Sun Valley annual releases are supported for 24 months or 36 months, depending on the edition. See the following table:<br>
+Windows Sun Valley annual releases are supported for 24 months or 36 months, depending on the edition. See the following table:<br>&nbsp;<br>
 
 
 | 24 months from the release date | 36 months from the release date |

windows/whats-new/windows-sv-prepare.md

@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ The following updates are required to support deploying Windows Sun Valley:
   - Configuration Manager will prompt you to accept the End User License Agreement on behalf of the users in your organization. 
   - If you would like to validate Sun Valley prior to release, simply sync the **Windows Insider Pre-release** category as well.   
 - If you use Windows Server Update Services (WSUS), you will need to sync the new Windows Sun Valley category. 
-- Windows Update for Business (WUfB) users can leverage the Target Version capability (not Feature Update deferrals).
+- Windows Update for Business (WUfB) users can leverage the **Target Version** capability (not Feature Update deferrals).
    -  Feature Update deferrals are great to move to newer versions of a product (for example: Windows 10 21H1 to Windows 10 21H2), but deferrals do not enable you to move between products (Windows 10 to Windows Sun Valley). Quality update deferrals will continue to work the same across both Windows 10 and Windows Sun Valley. 
    - WUfB has the additional benefit of two safety nets: offering blocks on non-eligible devices, and Safeguard holds. Safeguard holds will function for Windows Sun Valley devices just as they do for Windows 10. Administrators will have access to information on which safeguard holds are preventing individual devices from taking the upgrade to Windows Sun Valley. 
 - No action is required for you to use Microsoft Intune because it is cloud-based.
@@ -58,7 +58,7 @@ The following updates are required to support deploying Windows Sun Valley:
 - Windows Autopilot works seamlessly in a Windows Sun Valley Out-of-Box-Experience (OOBE) environment.
   - In an Intune environment, a Windows Sun Valley boot image needs to already exist on the device for Windows Autopilot to work with Windows Sun Valley. 
   - If the device comes with a Windows 10 boot image, an administrator can use Windows Autopilot to deploy Windows 10, and then use WUfB to upgrade to Windows Sun Valley.
-  - To use Windows Autopilot to upgrade existing devices, Configuration Manager and the task sequence: **Windows Autopilot for existing devices** can place the Windows Sun Valley boot image on the managed device, allowing Windows Autopilot to deploy Windows Sun Valley.
+  - To use [Windows Autopilot to upgrade existing devices](/mem/autopilot/existing-devices), Configuration Manager and the task sequence: **Windows Autopilot for existing devices** can place the Windows Sun Valley boot image on the managed device, allowing Windows Autopilot to deploy Windows Sun Valley.
   - Windows Autopilot cannot be used to downgrade a device from Windows Sun Valley to Windows 10.
 
 ## See also

windows/whats-new/windows-sv-requirements.md

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 The upgrade to Sun Valley is available for devices running Windows 10, version 20H1 or later, on eligible hardware.
 
-S mode is not supported on Windows Sun Valley. If you are running Windows in S mode, you will need to first [switch out of S mode](/windows/deployment/windows-10-pro-in-s-mode) prior to upgrading.  
+S mode is not supported on Windows Sun Valley. 
+- If you are running Windows in S mode, you will need to first [switch out of S mode](/windows/deployment/windows-10-pro-in-s-mode) prior to upgrading.  
 
 ## Hardware requirements
 

windows/whats-new/windows-sv.md

@@ -26,14 +26,14 @@ This article provides an introduction and answers some frequently asked question
 
 The following articles are available to learn about Windows Sun Valley: 
 
-1. Windows Sun Valley overview (this article): An introduction to Windows Sun Valley.
+1. Windows Sun Valley overview (this article): An introduction and brief overview.
-2. [Windows Sun Valley requirements](windows-sv-requirements.md): Hardware, software, network, and licensing requirements to deploy Windows Sun Valley.
+2. [Windows Sun Valley requirements](windows-sv-requirements.md): Requirements to deploy Windows Sun Valley.
-3. [Planning for Windows Sun Valley](windows-sv-plan.md): Guidance to create a Windows Sun Valley deployment plan.
+3. [Planning for Windows Sun Valley](windows-sv-plan.md): Information to help you create a Windows Sun Valley deployment plan.
-4. [Prepare for Windows Sun Valley](windows-sv-prepare.md): Procedures to ensure readiness to deploy Windows Sun Valley in your organization.
+4. [Prepare for Windows Sun Valley](windows-sv-prepare.md): Procedures to ensure readiness to deploy Windows Sun Valley.
 
 ## Introduction
 
-Windows Sun Valley is a newly designed Windows client operating system due to be released later in 2021. It is fresh and light, yet familiar to those who use Windows today. Windows Sun Valley is designed to support today's flexible [hybrid work](https://pulse.microsoft.com/the-journey-to-the-new-normal-driving-innovation-and-productivity-in-a-hybrid-world/) environment. The goal of this release is to be the most reliable, secure, connected, and performant OS release ever. 
+Windows Sun Valley is a newly designed Windows client operating system due to be released later in 2021. It is fresh and light, yet familiar to those who use Windows today. Windows Sun Valley is designed to support today's flexible [hybrid work](https://pulse.microsoft.com/the-journey-to-the-new-normal-driving-innovation-and-productivity-in-a-hybrid-world/) environment and to be the most reliable, secure, connected, and performant OS release ever. 
 
 Windows Sun Valley is built on the same foundation as Windows 10, so you can deploy, manage, and secure Windows Sun Valley using the same tools and solutions you use today.
 
@@ -41,10 +41,10 @@ All upgrades to Windows Sun Valley from Windows 10 will be free.
 
 ## How to get Windows Sun Valley
 
-Windows Sun Valley will delivered as an upgrade to devices running Windows 10 beginning in the first half of 2022. Windows Sun Valley will also be available on new devices that meet the hardware requirements.
+Windows Sun Valley will delivered as an upgrade to devices running Windows 10, beginning in the first half of 2022. Windows Sun Valley will also be available on new, eligible devices.
-- For managed PCs that meet requirements, the upgrade will be provided using the same process that you use today for feature updates. For more information, see [Management tools](windows-sv-prepare.md#management-tools).
+- For managed PCs that meet requirements, the upgrade will be provided using the same processes that you use today for feature updates. For more information, see [Management tools](windows-sv-prepare.md#management-tools).
 - For unmanaged PCs that meet requirements, the upgrade will be offered through Windows Update using [intelligent rollout](https://techcommunity.microsoft.com/t5/windows-it-pro-blog/using-machine-learning-to-improve-the-windows-10-update/ba-p/877860). Windows 10 devices purchased after June 2021 that meet or exceed the minimum hardware requirements for Windows Sun Valley will be offered the upgrade starting in October of 2021. 
-- You can get early access to test Windows Sun Valley by joining the [Windows Insider Program](https://insider.windows.com), or by enabling pre-release Windows 10 feature updates in Configuration Manager or Windows Server Update Services (WSUS).
+- You can get early access to test Windows Sun Valley by joining the the Windows Insider Program [Release Preview Channel](/windows-insider/business/validate-Release-Preview-Channel), or by enabling pre-release Windows 10 feature updates in Configuration Manager or Windows Server Update Services (WSUS).
 
 For more information about eligibility to upgrade, see [Windows Sun Valley requirements](windows-sv-requirements.md).
 
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 There are no unique licensing requirements for Windows Sun Valley beyond what is required for Windows 10 devices.
 
-Microsoft 365 licenses that include Windows licenses will permit you to run Windows Sun Valley on supported devices.
+Microsoft 365 licenses that include Windows 10 licenses will permit you to run Windows Sun Valley on supported devices.
 
 If you have a volume license, it will equally cover Windows Sun Valley and Windows 10 devices before and after upgrade.
 
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 ### Application compatibility
 
-Windows Sun Valley preserves the application compatibility promise made with Windows 10, and does not require changes to existing support processes or tooling to sustain the currency of applications and devices. Programs like App Assure and FastTrack for Microsoft M365 customers will continue to be available to support IT efforts to adopt and maintain Windows Sun Valley. For more information, see [Application compatibility](windows-sv-prepare.md#application-compatibility)
+Windows Sun Valley preserves the application compatibility promise made with Windows 10, and does not require changes to existing support processes or tooling to sustain the currency of applications and devices. Programs like App Assure and FastTrack for Microsoft M365 customers will continue to be available to support IT efforts to adopt and maintain Windows Sun Valley. 
+
+For more information, see [Application compatibility](windows-sv-prepare.md#application-compatibility)
 
 ## Windows Sun Valley servicing
 
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 ## Windows 10 servicing
 
-Windows 10 will continue to be supported with security updates until October 2025. For more information, see [Windows 10 lifecycle](windows-sv-plan.md#windows-10-lifecycle).
+Windows 10 will continue to be supported with security updates until October 2025. 
+
+For more information, see [Windows 10 lifecycle](windows-sv-plan.md#windows-10-lifecycle).
 
 ## Next steps